What You’ll Receive: A Sample Tribute Feedback Summary

Clear, compassionate feedback — designed to help you finish your tribute with confidence.

When you share your tribute with us, we take great care in how we respond. Every review is personal, thoughtful, and designed to support you — not just as a writer, but as someone remembering someone deeply important.

Below, you’ll find a sample Feedback Summary showing exactly what we deliver — compassionate notes, gentle suggestions, and practical support to help you move forward with confidence.

👉 This example is based on a shorter tribute (274 words). If your piece is longer, your feedback will go further — offering deeper insights into tone, flow, and structure to help you bring it all together.

Client: Jess W. (fictional)

Tribute Type: Eulogy for Father

Submitted Word Count: 274

Service Tier: Essential Tribute Review

Review Date: 2 July 2025

Reviewed By: DBS Editorial Team

Sample Tribute Review Feedback Summary

  • My dad was always fixing things. Radios, bikes, even the toaster, though sometimes he made it worse than before. I remember once when I was little, he tried to fix my doll’s arm with superglue and glued his fingers together instead. Mum laughed so much she nearly dropped her cup of tea. That’s one of my funniest memories.

    He was born in 1958 in Newcastle. Youngest of four brothers. Grew up in a terrace house with not much, but they made the most of it. He always said they had “bread and dripping and enough mischief to last a lifetime.”

    Dad worked as a mechanic most of his life. The garage on Pritchard Lane, he loved that place. I remember going there after school and the smell of oil and the old radio playing all the time.

    My brother’s wedding when he danced to ABBA. That was funny. He had no rhythm but danced anyway, arms everywhere, not caring who watched.

    He didn’t say much about his feelings. But he showed them. The way he’d bring me a hot water bottle without asking, or fix the garden fence when it didn’t really need fixing.

    He passed away last month, far too soon. Still doesn’t feel real, honestly.

    We used to go fishing early mornings. He’d sit with his flask and barely talk for hours, just happy to be there. I hated the worms, but I went anyway.

    He loved us, even if he wasn’t good at saying it.

    The dog got into the bin again on Tuesday.

    So thank you, Dad. For being steady, for being ours. I hope I said thank you enough.

✅ What’s Working Well

  • Genuine warmth and humour: Your memories — especially the doll superglue story and the ABBA dancing — bring joy and real personality to the tribute.

  • Clear emotional tone: Even without saying much, we feel your love for your dad in all the small actions you recall.

  • Honest voice: It sounds like you, and that matters. It doesn’t need to be fancy. Just real — which this already is.

🛠 Suggestions to Strengthen and Structure

1. Reorganise the Story Flow

At the moment, memories come in a bit of a jumble — this is very normal for a first draft.

Here’s a gentle structure we recommend:

  1. Opening line — start by setting the tone: “Thank you for being here to remember my dad.”

  2. His early life — where he was born, family background

  3. Work and hobbies — his job at the garage, fishing, fixing things

  4. Family life and memories — funny stories, small ways he showed love

  5. Final farewell — gratitude, final thoughts

This will help your listeners follow along and give the tribute a steady rhythm.

2. Remove Accidental Line

“The dog got into the bin again on Tuesday.”

This line looks like it slipped in from somewhere else — easy to do when editing. Best to remove unless it was intended to make a point about your dad (e.g., he used to scold the dog?).

3. Expand the Ending

Your final lines are touching but could use a little more closure.

For example:

“So thank you, Dad. For being steady, for being ours.

I hope you knew how much you were loved. I’ll carry you with me — always.”

4. Light Grammar & Punctuation Notes

We’ve gently adjusted:

  • Comma placement in longer sentences

  • Missing words or misused tense (e.g., “he loved us even if he wasn’t good at saying it” — small tweaks to help it flow)

🌿 Tailored Personalisation Guidance

Example guidance showing how we help clients adapt or expand their tribute in their own voice.

  • Your strongest moments come from practical memories (fixing objects, fishing trips, the garage). Leaning slightly more into these reinforces who your dad was, without needing added sentiment.

  • The humour works best when it’s brief and observational, such as the superglue story and the ABBA dancing. Keeping these light and contained prevents them from overshadowing quieter moments.

  • Consider whether you want to name the relationship more explicitly once (for example, “as his daughter”) to anchor the perspective early on.

  • The line “He loved us, even if he wasn’t good at saying it” is emotionally central. You may choose to let this stand alone, giving it space to land.

  • Small, everyday gestures (the hot water bottle, fixing the fence) are powerful. These are the moments people listening are likely to recognise and connect with.

💭 Custom Reflection Prompts

Sample prompts to help clients recall memories and ideas to further expand their tribute.

  • When you picture your dad fixing things, is there one object or moment that captures his patience or humour even more clearly?

  • You mention he wasn’t someone who talked about feelings. Is there a small action you haven’t included yet that quietly shows his care?

  • The fishing mornings are calm and reflective. Is there one sensory detail (sound, smell, temperature) that still stands out to you?

  • When you say “He loved us, even if he wasn’t good at saying it,” would it feel right to add one short example — or does the simplicity already say enough?

  • If your dad could hear this tribute, is there one line you’d want him to recognise immediately as being “you”?

📌 Practical Speaking Tips

Example tips showing how we help clients feel calmer and more confident when delivering their tribute.

  • Your current tribute (274 words) will likely run at around 2.5 - 3 minutes when read aloud at a steady pace.

  • Consider a brief pause after the superglue story and after “He showed them” — these are natural emotional beats.

  • The sentence “He passed away last month, far too soon” may feel heavier when spoken. It’s okay to slow down here or simplify if needed.

  • If emotions rise near the end, you could shorten the closing to just the final two lines without losing meaning.

  • Keep the printed version double-spaced, with short paragraphs clearly separated — this will make it easier to find your place if you need to pause.

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