When you share your tribute with us, we take great care in how we respond. Every review is personal, thoughtful, and designed to support you — not just as a writer, but as someone remembering someone deeply important.

Below, you’ll find a sample Feedback Summary showing exactly what we deliver — compassionate notes, gentle suggestions, and practical support to help you move forward with confidence.

👉 This example is based on a shorter tribute (274 words). If your piece is longer, your feedback will go further — offering deeper insights into tone, flow, and structure to help you bring it all together.

Sample Tribute Review Feedback Summary

Client: Jess W. (fictional)

Tribute Type: Eulogy for Father

Submitted Word Count: 274

Service Tier: Essential Tribute Review

Review Date: 2 July 2025

Reviewed By: DBS Editorial Team

Hi Jess,

Thank you so much for sharing your tribute draft with us. We know it’s not easy to write something like this, especially while grieving — but what you’ve done already is incredibly heartfelt. You’ve captured a true sense of your dad’s spirit: funny, hands-on, quietly caring, and deeply loved.

Our aim is to support you in finishing this with confidence — and make sure your stories flow clearly when spoken aloud.

Below, you’ll find some encouragement, gentle editing notes, and tips to help you shape your lovely start into a tribute that feels true, clear, and complete.

My dad was always fixing things. Radios, bikes, even the toaster, though sometimes he made it worse than before. I remember once when I was little, he tried to fix my doll’s arm with superglue and glued his fingers together instead. Mum laughed so much she nearly dropped her cup of tea. That’s one of my funniest memories.
He was born in 1958 in Newcastle. Youngest of four brothers. Grew up in a terrace house with not much, but they made the most of it. He always said they had “bread and dripping and enough mischief to last a lifetime.”
Dad worked as a mechanic most of his life. The garage on Pritchard Lane, he loved that place. I remember going there after school and the smell of oil and the old radio playing all the time.
My brother’s wedding when he danced to ABBA. That was funny. He had no rhythm but danced anyway, arms everywhere, not caring who watched.
He didn’t say much about his feelings. But he showed them. The way he’d bring me a hot water bottle without asking, or fix the garden fence when it didn’t really need fixing.
He passed away last month, far too soon. Still doesn’t feel real, honestly.
We used to go fishing early mornings. He’d sit with his flask and barely talk for hours, just happy to be there. I hated the worms, but I went anyway.
He loved us, even if he wasn’t good at saying it.
The dog got into the bin again on Tuesday.
So thank you, Dad. For being steady, for being ours. I hope I said thank you enough.

✅ What’s Working Well

Genuine warmth and humour: Your memories — especially the doll superglue story and the ABBA dancing — bring joy and real personality to the tribute.

Clear emotional tone: Even without saying much, we feel your love for your dad in all the small actions you recall.
Honest voice: It sounds like you, and that matters. It doesn’t need to be fancy. Just real — which this already is.

🛠 Suggestions to Strengthen and Structure

1. Reorganise the Story Flow

At the moment, memories come in a bit of a jumble — this is very normal for a first draft.

Here’s a gentle structure we recommend:

Opening line — start by setting the tone: “Thank you for being here to remember my dad.”
His early life — where he was born, family background
Work and hobbies — his job at the garage, fishing, fixing things
Family life and memories — funny stories, small ways he showed love
Final farewell — gratitude, final thoughts

This will help your listeners follow along and give the tribute a steady rhythm.

2. Remove Accidental Line

“The dog got into the bin again on Tuesday.”

This line looks like it slipped in from somewhere else — easy to do when editing. Best to remove unless it was intended to make a point about your dad (e.g., he used to scold the dog?).

3. Expand the Ending

Your final lines are touching but could use a little more closure.

For example:

“So thank you, Dad. For being steady, for being ours.

I hope you knew how much you were loved. I’ll carry you with me — always.”

4. Light Grammar & Punctuation Notes

We’ve gently adjusted:

Comma placement in longer sentences

Missing words or misused tense (e.g., “he loved us even if he wasn’t good at saying it” — small tweaks to help it flow)

These changes are reflected in your lightly edited version.

✨ Voice & Tone Notes

You’re doing a wonderful job of being conversational and sincere. That’s exactly right for a eulogy — don’t feel pressured to make it “perfect.” We’d encourage keeping your humour and honesty front and centre.

📄 Lightly Edited Version

Below is a gently polished version of your tribute:

Stories rearranged for natural progression
Mistakes corrected with care
Your voice and style completely preserved

Feel free to copy and paste this version to use as a foundation for further edits.

Thank you all for being here today to remember my dad.
My dad was always fixing things — radios, bikes, even the toaster. Though, to be honest, sometimes he made things worse than before. I remember when I was little, he tried to fix my doll’s arm with superglue and ended up gluing his fingers together. Mum laughed so hard she nearly dropped her cup of tea. It’s one of my funniest memories of them together.
He was born in 1958 in Newcastle, the youngest of four brothers. They grew up in a terrace house with not much, but he always said they had “bread and dripping and enough mischief to last a lifetime.”
Dad worked as a mechanic most of his life — the garage on Pritchard Lane was like a second home to him. I’d visit after school, and I still remember the smell of oil and the old radio always playing in the background.
At my brother’s wedding, he danced to ABBA. No rhythm whatsoever — arms everywhere — but he didn’t care who was watching. That was Dad.
He wasn’t someone who spoke about his feelings much, but he showed them in small ways — bringing me a hot water bottle without asking, fixing the garden fence even when it didn’t really need fixing.
We used to go fishing early in the mornings. He’d sit with his flask, not saying much, just happy to be there. I hated the worms, but I went anyway. He loved that.
He passed away last month — far too soon. It still doesn’t feel real.
Dad, thank you for being steady, funny, and quietly caring. I hope you knew how much you were loved. I’ll carry you with me — always.

🗣️ Speaking Tips

Estimated speaking time: ~2.5–3 minutes

Print with wide spacing and large text for easier reading
If you get emotional (completely normal), take a breath or pause — no one minds
Practice out loud once or twice if you can

🙋 Questions Welcome

If you’d like to ask us anything about the edits or would like help refining a specific section, you’re welcome to contact us. One follow-up is included in your service.

Warmly,

The DBS Editorial Team
Helping you honour your loved one — your way.

What You’ll Receive: A Sample Tribute Feedback Summary